Toefl speaking personal independent

The teacher who has influenced me the most is my junior high school class teacher
First of all he was a vey humorous person
For example , he always has joyful atmosphere and delivered the humorous condition while studying
Besides, he has supported me morally
To be specific, he give me advice and comfortable when I get into trouble
He also encourage me to overcome my passive attitude
I think I owe him a lot and I would like to pay him back if I become success

I remember I passed my transfer test therefore I entranced the university.
The reason I remember it so clearly is that I spent hard time for the test .
When I discharged from military force my father entered into the prison .
I really thought about my self. What is my most priority for me and parents ?
And I thought what is the most things I do well?
I had to work several hours thus I didn't have much time to study for the test
Without everybody's encouragement, I wouldn't have accomplished the success
Even though I went to the top university, it was an unforgettable experience to me